Monday, March 23, 2009

Biodata

Hong Quan is a year 3 chemistry undergraduate at the National University of Singapore. Prior to pursuing his bachelor degree, he was a reconnaissance specialist in an infantry brigade where he displayed leadership abilities in leading a four man team in various exercises.

Being a firm believer in the need for constant learning, Hong Quan is always on a look out for new skills with which he can improve himself. He is currently picking up a new language and am looking to further his studies upon graduation.

Hong Quan’s interests lies with the environment. He is a mountaineering enthusiast and has recently climbed South-East Asia’s highest peak, Mount Kinabalu. As such, he hopes that his knowledge in Chemistry can be used in the protection of the environment and hopes to pursue a career in Environmental Chemistry or Green Chemistry.
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7 comments:

  1. hajimemashiteMarch 25, 2009 at 1:54 AM

    Hi Raydon,

    Your passion in mountaineering is truly impressive. I believe your interest in mountain climbing speaks for your desire to pursue a career in Environmental Chemistry or Green Chemistry.

    However, I feel that you could exemplify your enthusiasm in this area more effectively if you had chosen to write from a first person's point of view. In adopting the first person's approach, I believe that it would help to bring out your passion more directly and make your reader more convinced of your desires.

    Cheers
    Caroline

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  2. Jackson HoonMarch 25, 2009 at 10:00 PM

    Hey Raydon,

    I am not quite sure if I agree with Caroline that you need to write in the first person's perspective to exemplify the enthusiasm. I feel that a biodata should be short and concise. Thus, the most that we can afford any point is about 1-2 sentences. Using the first person's perspective may not be very much more useful in that case.

    However, I think that you can add a line or two about why you like the environment or mountain climbing. Perhaps something like the following:

    The thrill and satisfaction of watching the scenery from the mountain top is indeed beyond words.

    In this way, the reader may have a better idea of your passion for mountain climbing.

    Jackson

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  3. chautingMarch 26, 2009 at 10:23 AM

    Hi,
    I think that it is alright to write as a third party. However, I think that it is not necessary to mention about his reason for his interest in mountain climbing, unless he draws further link to his wanted career.

    Good luck, Honq Quan!

    Chau Ting

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  4. Alvin LeongMarch 26, 2009 at 12:06 PM

    Actually I think the reason Hong Quan mentioned about mountain climbing is to let people know how passionate he really is about the environment. Although it is not explicitly mentioned, I personally think that context in which the mountain climbing point was stated is self-explanatory.

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  5. lianyeeMarch 30, 2009 at 3:21 AM

    Hi Hong Quan,

    I find your biodata short and sweet. All the best for your further studies and in finding the dream career you desired! Follow your heart=)

    Lian Yee

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  6. ChingApril 14, 2009 at 12:32 AM

    Hey Hong Quan,

    I agree with the third person perspective too because when writing from the first person perspective, we will need to be careful with the words, so as not to give the impression that we are showing off.

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  7. Raydon Koh Hong QuanApril 15, 2009 at 1:23 AM

    Hi people,

    Thanks for your comments on my biodata! I'll look into the suggestions that had been made and try to improve on it as well.

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